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Keith Offline
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#1
10-24-2012, 07:45 AM
Tectonic plate shifts
huge ocean displacement
friend’s summer beach party
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10-24-2012, 07:53 AM
Hi TOMH - great 'ku!
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#3
10-24-2012, 08:35 AM
(10-24-2012, 07:45 AM)TimeOnMyHands Wrote:  Tectonic plate shifts
huge ocean displacement
friend’s summer beach party
nicely done, the last line is both dark and light at the same time.
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#4
05-28-2013, 12:29 AM
I was just going through the old posts in here and found this gem.
Excellent stuff thanks for this.
AR
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06-10-2013, 08:47 AM
(05-28-2013, 12:29 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  I was just going through the old posts in here and found this gem.
Excellent stuff thanks for this.
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Hi AR Many thanks for digging this one out Smile and your kind comments TOMH

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#6
06-11-2013, 10:44 AM
Hi,
I love how the last line wraps it up. It's both humorous and serious at the same time.
Thanks for the read Smile
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06-13-2013, 02:08 AM
Thank you Volaticus much appreciated. TOMH

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