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01-12-2013, 06:19 AM
(This post was last modified: 06-19-2015, 07:11 AM by Todd.)
The night was the night.
The mosquitoes' whine sounded
like mosquitoes whining, and the moon
was large and glowed
in the darkness like the moon.
Metaphors and similes withered like
comparisons we could no longer make.
Everything was simply what it was.
The original poem and comments can be found
here
It could be worse
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Hey Todd,
I love how this is written, using similes and metaphors while not using it (I didn't think that was possible while still being amazingly poetic)
A very well written poem that definitely belongs here, let's just hope you're not psychic though.
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Very sad poem. Every writer reading this cried on the inside. Very well written.
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I'm so glad to see that people agree with my assessment of this poem -- it really did affect me deeply and I definitely think it's a standout that deserved to be paid more attention.
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I felt calm while reading this, but kind of eerie and depressed too. I felt a bit of nihilism too, which I enjoyed.
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Thank you all for the kind words, it's always nice to know when a poem has an impact.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Thank you Heart and Saima. Appreciate the comments
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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A script for a horror film.
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I was really moved, when I read it. I felt sad, but serene. A beautiful poem.
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Too tranquil for such a catastrophic moment and hence the sinister beauty herein. Nice work and selection to spotlight. Come on, everyone knows that the moon would extinguish that night!
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Well, we will try to keep poetry alive here!
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
