11-25-2014, 05:59 AM 
	
	
	
		Stomach cramps
On crowded bus;
Shit happens
	
	
	
On crowded bus;
Shit happens
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					Embarrassment
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		11-25-2014, 05:59 AM 
	
	 
		Stomach cramps On crowded bus; Shit happens 
		
		
		11-25-2014, 12:09 PM 
	
	 
		Why the random caps? The poem itself is somewhat funny, unless you've actually had an experience like that then it just surfaces repressed memories.
	 
cliche my forte   
		
		
		11-26-2014, 03:52 AM 
	
	 (11-25-2014, 12:09 PM)azure Wrote: Why the random caps? The poem itself is somewhat funny, unless you've actually had an experience like that then it just surfaces repressed memories. Thanks; yes the caps are unecessary, don't know why I did that in all honesty. My intention was to elicit differing emotions, whether that was pity,revulsion, humour, embarrassment etc. all dependant upon one's own life experience. Whether that works is another thing entirely. 
		
		
		11-26-2014, 05:08 PM 
	
	 
		Brilliant! Now, this, this is a pun. Hyperbole, but I thought it was pretty funny.
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