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		Rules: Write a poem for national poetry month on the topic or form described. Each poem should appear as a separate reply to this thread. The goal is to, at the end of the month have written 30 poems for National Poetry Month. 
 
 
 
 
 Topic 4: Lovely ella would love to read a poem about the signs of aging.
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		At the reunion			
 
 
 A slow unraveling begins.
 Half-remembered faces
 like ghosts, drowned in fat
 or trapped behind cobwebs of wrinkles.
 
 My French teacher taught me
 what a victim is, how power rots,
 that innocence is no excuse for anything.
 I'd looked forward to meeting her again.
 
 She’d married my art teacher
 in the meantime. Neither of them
 reaches my shoulders; she hunches
 and scurries, more insect than bird.
 
 Do they still write, paint? No,
 they’re busy redecorating their home.
 We’re doing  one room at a time
 and making them perfect.
 
 I ask how long they’ve lived there.
 They reply fortytwo years.
 Silently I forgive her.
 She’s had punishment enough.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Love the ending on that one especially, Mercedes.
	 
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		04-04-2015, 01:05 PM 
(This post was last modified: 04-04-2015, 01:07 PM by Todd.)
	
	 
		It’s When You Notice
 that she’s staring
 because you look
 like her father.
 You can’t say how old she is.
 It’s like going to sleep,
 and waking to a world
 where everyone is young
 except you.
 
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
 
		
	 
	
	
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		 (04-04-2015, 01:05 PM)Todd Wrote:  It’s When You Notice
 
 that she’s staring
 because you look
 like her father.
 You can’t say how old she is.
 It’s like you went to sleep
 and woke to a world
 where everyone was young
 except you.
 
The Rip Van Winkle syndrome. Frightening. My dentist looks like a school kid.    
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-04-2015, 01:05 PM)Todd Wrote:  It’s When You Notice
 that she’s staring
 because you look
 like her father.
 You can’t say how old she is.
 It’s like going to sleep,
 and waking to a world
 where everyone is young
 except you.
 
very cool, Todd
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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 < old gardens >
 
 old gardens with flowers
 filled with flowers
 in old gardens
 the flowers
 are the ones that come back
 and old gardens tend
 to be tended by hands
 made older by the sun
 made brown like the leaves
 the leaves in old gardens
 old gardens which tend
 to be tended
 by old hands
 
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		I like the way your poem starts with a broad view, and focuses down from garden to flowers to hands. Nice contrast between new life and old.
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		April 4th; nappy of the month
 For the Signs they are a Agein'
 
 I fear my prostate gland will fail, and fallen arches fall
 as younger men's endeavours push my bones against the wall.
 My skin's elasticity has stretched away through years
 and hangs upon my frame like the lobes upon my ears.
 Hair grows from every orifice, apart from eyes and mouth,
 the ballsack's gotten saggy and the pecker's pointing south.
 my lights are dim, my head is bald, my gut is twice its size
 from eating lots of sweetend food and munching on meat pies
 I wouldn't swap a single day, or years for strength or youth.
 having lots of grand-kids made me too long in the tooth.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Blood Moon
 This morning
 He nods
 
 it wakens me
 
 I do not age
 traditionally
 
 He will shave
 all this distracting grey
 once
 He is risen
 
 It's been too long
 since
 I was a clean-cut boy
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Yes it's true
 The artist has fingered
 charcoal lines on my face
 and my body speaks
 each movement.
 
 I seem to be
 a 45 played at 33
 but its all expected
 even accepted.
 
 Come closer
 I have a secret to tell,
 the fountain of youth
 sits on my knee
 it fills from a bottle
 whilst I drink.
 
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-04-2015, 06:52 PM)Keith Wrote:  Yes it's true
 The artist has fingered
 charcoal lines on my face
 and my body speaks
 each movement.
 
 I seem to be
 a 45 played at 33 I'm so jealous of this line!
 but its all expected
 even accepted.
 
 Come closer
 I have a secret to tell,
 the fountain of youth
 sits on my knee
 it fills from a bottle
 whilst I drink.
 
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		Just got time to free write a few thoughts, compared to what has already been offered a very poor effort - but something down on paper so still feely pretty chuffed.  Some great offerings above, really enjoyed reading them.
 
 Being old is a consensual thing.
 An invitation only event, to a private party;
 a fuse site, buried deep within the mind.
 The unopened envelope
 will keep the creep out of age.
 
 Spotty doctor’s cautionary notes of
 “at your age, it is to be expected”
 will not usher in one moment of change.
 Old enters through the eyes,
 eats away at upturned lips.
 
 A body is just there for a given convention
 and a certain amount of decoration.
 Over used, abused, a body has no sway
 on the desire to dance, delight or play.
 Only after the eyes have forgotten
 how to smile, will the touch taper be lit.
 
 The signs of aging are dependant
 on how damp the powder is.
 A bang and a big brash display,
 or just quietly fizzle away.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		nice aj, and everyone else. at this rate i might get one or two in the other threads. come on newbs you can post here as well
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		History Be Damned (For Tom)
 You will not whittle away at what is mine,
 that is my job.
 What was soft and wet, covered
 with fine moss that caught each morning's dew
 has bared its own gnarly form, its grain
 raised and smoothed, raised, smoothed.
 
 You can drop like flies, I am used to still standing.
 As sweet milk metaphorizes into a memorable
 gorgonzola, I have taken you in; now my adornment,
 you run in blue streaks, swirl in patterns I've stolen
 without regret or intention of returning.
 You may no longer be you, but you are me.
 
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		 (04-04-2015, 04:51 PM)billy Wrote:  April 4th; nappy of the month
 For the Signs they are a Agein'
 
 I fear my prostate gland will fail, and fallen arches fall
 as younger men's endeavours push my bones against the wall.
 My skin's elasticity has stretched away through years
 and hangs upon my frame like the lobes upon my ears.
 Hair grows from every orifice, apart from eyes and mouth,
 the ballsack's gotten saggy and the pecker's pointing south.
 my lights are dim, my head is bald, my gut is twice its size
 from eating lots of sweetend food and munching on meat pies
 I wouldn't swap a single day, or years for strength or youth.
 having lots of grand-kids made me too long in the tooth.
   Especially these lines:
"My skin's elasticity has stretched away through years and hangs upon my frame like the lobes upon my ears.
 Hair grows from every orifice, apart from eyes and mouth,
 the ballsack's gotten saggy and the pecker's pointing south*."
 
So many other wonderful poems, but most SO  serious. 
billy's world's a far, far better place to be. 
 So where does it point in Australia? North?  I don't know about ewe, but I got my suspicions.
 
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		Olded 
 Youth returns not at the ticking of the clock:
 nor Passion its ship again brings to dock.
 Unnoticed has Lust gently faded away,
 just as did spring, summer has not stayed,
 nor shall He return, upon another day!
 
 My memory has fled, so too my
 prowess in bed, and the hair on my head.
 My eyes have a film, my muscles sag
 and my bones are now a little…too brittle.
 I don't mind so much the thought of dying.
 My years have been flying like the "digit
 counter fall" on some too easy pinball…
 machine, but did they have to take away
 all these things I took for granted?
 But yes, I see the point.
 If things were as they were in my youth
 I would never want to leave and it's obvious
 that there are too many of us here now.
 
 Erthona
 
 
 ©2015
 
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
 The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Cracked, wrinkled, sucked inlike a sack stretched then loosened then stretched
 and  now covering a mass of bones and flesh
 that only takes up half the space -
 
 And yet it still bleeds. Too dry, too thirsty;
 the water doesn't fill
 the other half,
 
 It just leaks out from cracks
 from a once solid wall.
 
When it finally snows here, I'll catch a snowflake and put it in the fridge.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Older
 A day can slip by quicker than you planned
 and everything grows one day older.
 The wind can kiss your face or kiss the land -
 a day can slip by. Quicker than you planned
 time can turn the mountains into sand
 and even passing stars grow colder.
 A day can slip by quicker than you planned
 and everything grows one day older.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		nice triolet miloshould it be [slips] in the penultimate refrain? i like that it doesn't feel forced.
 
		
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