07-11-2015, 01:49 AM
The field allows
its lily colored silence
to anyone who can walk
into it with dignity.
its lily colored silence
to anyone who can walk
into it with dignity.
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Concession
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07-11-2015, 01:49 AM
The field allows
its lily colored silence to anyone who can walk into it with dignity.
07-13-2015, 11:33 PM
71, I really like the wisdom herein. ‘allows’ seems a bit off to my ear.
Would something like ‘offers’ convey the proper action? You could also use ‘lily-colored.’ I might substitute ‘through it’ for ‘into it.’ See what you think. Thanks for sharing this one./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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