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		We live in twosand I am by Myself, centre of the dichotomy.
 (The left is Grave, the right is Brave.)
 I can feel my head splitting open
 if I run my fingers along the scalp.
 
 It's tearing apart like two halves of an orange
 in a farmer's strong and mud-stained hands
 (- almost a bloody Negro, his wife jokes in bed,
 with my head in two halves on the dressing-table).
 
 - Two is the union of spirits,
 jokes the barman as he mixes whiskey and scotch.
 
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		I don't remember how the world turned greyor why we stopped pretending -- just the way
 we twisted into text and through our phones
 we sank. I sent you sticks, you sent me stones,
 and neither of us watched the ricochet.
 
 We drained her world of joyfulness and play
 and as she fell beneath our sad melee
 we argued about -- what?  Libido?  Loans?
 I don't remember.
 
 She heard it all but, mindful to obey,
 she didn't interfere, just slipped away.
 Please tell me how a penitent atones
 for bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
 Dear God, no words remain, but still I pray
 I don't remember.
 
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		 (04-03-2016, 06:03 AM)Leanne Wrote:  I don't remember how the world turned greyor why we stopped pretending -- just the way
 we twisted into text and through our phones
 we sank. I sent you sticks, you sent me stones,
 and neither of us watched the ricochet.
 
 We drained her world of joyfulness and play
 and as she fell beneath our sad melee
 we argued about -- what?  Libido?  Loans?
 I don't remember.
 
 She heard it all but, mindful to obey,
 she didn't interfere, just slipped away.
 Please tell me how a penitent atones
 for bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
 Dear God, no words remain, but still I pray
 I don't remember.
 
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		Under the sycamore tree with Bonnie MaeOn a long gone, unforgotten Summer’s  day
 And we began to talk as lovers can
 About the things I could do as a man
 As I would be in two weeks and a day.
 
 I’d like to travel far away, explore
 The sandy dunes of some forgotten shore
 Or bear a flag for a distant foreign war
 Or see the way the norther lights can burn
 And go and go, never to return
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 She said she liked her head upon my lap,
 The pool of warmth, a lazy summer nap
 And staying where she’d never need a map.
 She said that she could make me feel that way
 And if she could she knew she’d like to stay
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 What could I do, abandon my endeavor
 To occupy my life's adventures, never
 Find my path but stay with her forever?
 The knowledge of her simple face atones -
 I killed her there and left her peaceful bones
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Shades of Browning there, milo... you're creepy that way. 
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		AJ, I just keep reading this over and over.  It's lovely.  (04-02-2016, 05:39 PM)cidermaid Wrote:  Two lines make a couplet of words about love.They should be placed together, entwined in love.
 It is silly to ally a syllable,
 without a refrain. How would we feel the love?
 
 Ali compared the pairing to a bright stone,
 shining in isolation -- a necklace of love.
 
 All I know, is that two separate clauses
 are transformed by pauses, into words of love.
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		 (04-02-2016, 05:39 PM)cidermaid Wrote:  Two lines make a couplet of words about love.They should be placed together, entwined in love.
 It is silly to ally a syllable,
 without a refrain. How would we feel the love?
 
 Ali compared the pairing to a bright stone,
 shining in isolation -- a necklace of love.
 
 All I know, is that two separate clauses
 are transformed by pauses, into words of love.
 
I agree with Leanne, this is really lovely, and has the soft elegance and eloquence of a Sara Teasdale or Christina Rossetti lyric poem.
	 
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		Wow!  Some really wonderful poems in this thread.  Moved.  Best string of poems I've seen compiled on this site in awhile.  Great work gang.  Thanks for the efforts from an admirer.
	 
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		I adore this one, milo, partly for its beautifully macabre ending, which is so much like those wonderfully twisted poems of yore which bring you soft, tranquil, pleasing, and natural images, only to round them off with brutality. It reminds me of that Siegfried Sassoon poem, whose name I can't for my life recall, about a returned WWI soldier standing at his garden gate and reflecting on England's green and pleasant land, before we find out that he lost a leg in battle and is glad to have done so, given the horrors of where he's been.  (04-03-2016, 09:59 AM)milo Wrote:  Under the sycamore tree with Bonnie MaeOn a long gone, unforgotten Summer’s  day
 And we began to talk as lovers can
 About the things I could do as a man
 As I would be in two weeks and a day.
 
 I’d like to travel far away, explore
 The sandy dunes of some forgotten shore
 Or bear a flag for a distant foreign war
 Or see the way the norther lights can burn
 And go and go, never to return
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 She said she liked her head upon my lap,
 The pool of warmth, a lazy summer nap
 And staying where she’d never need a map.
 She said that she could make me feel that way
 And if she could she knew she’d like to stay
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 What could I do, abandon my endeavor
 To occupy my life's adventures, never
 Find my path but stay with her forever?
 The knowledge of her simple face atones -
 I killed her there and left her peaceful bones
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
  (04-03-2016, 06:03 AM)Leanne Wrote:  Please tell me how a penitent atonesfor bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
 
These are my favourite lines. Chilling and emotional and perfect. I feel bad about my free verse wank-stains of NaPM entries, now  
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		Stutter
 For a second time this month
 I have cut my tongue-
 chewing glass.
 
 Maybe I have been too careful
 to keep scores in parity-
 tasting blood.
 
 I've been stuttering over reason
 searching for a simple
 "I'm sorry."
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-03-2016, 11:12 AM)Heslopian Wrote:  I adore this one, milo, partly for its beautifully macabre ending, which is so much like those wonderfully twisted poems of yore which bring you soft, tranquil, pleasing, and natural images, only to round them off with brutality. It reminds me of that Siegfried Sassoon poem, whose name I can't for my life recall, about a returned WWI soldier standing at his garden gate and reflecting on England's green and pleasant land, before we find out that he lost a leg in battle and is glad to have done so, given the horrors of where he's been.
 
  (04-03-2016, 09:59 AM)milo Wrote:  Under the sycamore tree with Bonnie MaeOn a long gone, unforgotten Summer’s  day
 And we began to talk as lovers can
 About the things I could do as a man
 As I would be in two weeks and a day.
 
 I’d like to travel far away, explore
 The sandy dunes of some forgotten shore
 Or bear a flag for a distant foreign war
 Or see the way the norther lights can burn
 And go and go, never to return
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 She said she liked her head upon my lap,
 The pool of warmth, a lazy summer nap
 And staying where she’d never need a map.
 She said that she could make me feel that way
 And if she could she knew she’d like to stay
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
 What could I do, abandon my endeavor
 To occupy my life's adventures, never
 Find my path but stay with her forever?
 The knowledge of her simple face atones -
 I killed her there and left her peaceful bones
 Under the sycamore tree.
 
  (04-03-2016, 06:03 AM)Leanne Wrote:  Please tell me how a penitent atonesfor bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
 These are my favourite lines. Chilling and emotional and perfect. I feel bad about my free verse wank-stains of NaPM entries, now
  
Thanks, Jack, it's not like I just read leanne's and ripped it off or anything . . .
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-03-2016, 01:42 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Two by Two
 Two by two we boarded the ark;
 a safe-house built of Gopher wood.
 I looked for you, but it was dark
 
 and time was short; we’d soon embark
 for promised, safer neighbourhoods.
 Two by two we boarded. The ark
 
 was huge but housed no germ, no shark—
 we left them where the sinners stood.
 I looked for you, but it was dark
 
 and there were howls and growls and barks
 at clouds above, engorged with blood.
 Two by two we boarded the ark
 
 and prayed a coloured bow would arc
 beyond the borders of the flood.
 I looked for you… but it was dark
 
 and God had long since set his mark
 and then He saw that it was good.
 Two by two we boarded the ark
 I looked for you, but it was dark.
 
This is great, Paul. Would love to see it reworked when the month is over, with a wee change to the refrain. Because it's a trochee, board would work better than boarded. The tense shift shouldn't matter.
	 
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		Two roads converged
 Two roads converged where a fellow stood
 and my lorry's brakes – such rotten luck –
 failed as only big lorry brakes could
 on a blind corner in a moonlit wood
 and I drove the  bastard  into the muck;
 
 then rapidly parking in neutral gear
 I gathered him up, now dismembered.
 His face though, looked no worse for wear,
 showing no final look of fear:
 like his last thoughts were of joy remembered.
 
 The moon fell on the eglantine
 elegantly, as I scurried around
 to dig a hole and throw him in
 then slosh about some gasoline –
 and then I heard the baleful sound
 
 of approaching cars. Tossing in the pool
 my match, I rigged a spit of sorts,
 barbecuing like a tool.
 Drivers swerved, called me a fool,
 and threatened me with the law of torts.
 
 I say this now with some despair
 somewhere, in the forests sable
 I roasted a man in the open air
 and the taste was agreeable
 
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		 (04-03-2016, 08:43 PM)Achebe Wrote:  Two roads converged
 Two roads converged where a fellow stood
 and my lorry's brakes – such rotten luck –
 failed as only big lorry brakes could
 on a blind corner in a moonlit wood
 and I drove the  bastard  into the muck;
 
 then rapidly parking in neutral gear
 I gathered him up, now dismembered.
 His face though, looked no worse for wear,
 showing no final look of fear:
 like his last thoughts were of joy remembered.
 
 The moon fell on the eglantine
 elegantly, as I scurried around
 to dig a hole and throw him in
 then slosh about some gasoline –
 and then I heard the baleful sound
 
 of approaching cars. Tossing in the pool
 my match, I rigged a spit of sorts,
 barbecuing like a tool.
 Drivers swerved, called me a fool,
 and threatened me with the law of torts.
 
 I say this now with some despair
 somewhere, in the forests sable
 I roasted a man in the open air
 and the taste was agreeable
   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (04-03-2016, 01:35 PM)Leanne Wrote:   (04-03-2016, 01:42 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Two by TwoThis is great, Paul. Would love to see it reworked when the month is over, with a wee change to the refrain. Because it's a trochee, board would work better than boarded. The tense shift shouldn't matter.
 Two by two we boarded the ark;
 a safe-house built of Gopher wood.
 I looked for you, but it was dark
 
 and time was short; we’d soon embark
 for promised, safer neighbourhoods.
 Two by two we boarded. The ark
 
 was huge but housed no germ, no shark—
 we left them where the sinners stood.
 I looked for you, but it was dark
 
 and there were howls and growls and barks
 at clouds above, engorged with blood.
 Two by two we boarded the ark
 
 and prayed a coloured bow would arc
 beyond the borders of the flood.
 I looked for you… but it was dark
 
 and God had long since set his mark
 and then He saw that it was good.
 Two by two we boarded the ark
 I looked for you, but it was dark.
 
Thanks Leanne. I was aware of the meter glitch but ran out of time to fix it. Ideally I'd like to begin with "In two's we ..." 
Anyway, I've been away all weekend and have some catching up to do.     
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		Thank you poets this is quite the eclectic collection, and a super read, well done to all...thus far...some poets still need to catch this one.
	 
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