Sex

[Smiley]

Sex is a pleasure i aim to please
Its a good way to release
First, you tease
And after, you will be at ease

[Magpie]

fuck me another sex poem

[RiverNotch]

Sex is a pleasure i aim to please
Its a good way to release
First, you tease
And after, you will be at ease

Didn't you write "I'm high again"? xD I kinda like the silly, unpolished style of these, even if I'd rather they had a little more polish---when I write something after, er, release, I do tend to polish it somewhat before sharing xD

I will say, "release" doesn't rhyme with the others, so it really doesn't fit.

Also, you don't tease then get at ease---stuff has to happen in between, ya know. Copious rubbing or petting or sucking. And if it ain't copious, then you're doing something wrong....

[Smiley]

Magpie, fuck yeah

Rivernotch, First, you tease And after, you will be at ease
I meant it as first you start then after ALL of it, you shall be at ease

And hm, please and release, I thought it rhymed.

”Didn't you write "I'm high again"? xD I kinda like the silly, unpolished style of these”
Yes, yes I did and im glad you liked it!

[Bruce V]

Honestly, offensive doggerel.

[wasellajam]

Honestly, offensive doggerel.

Agree, not what I come here to read.

[milo]

Honestly, offensive doggerel.

Agree, not what I come here to read.

It is pretty cringe

[alonso ramoran]

And hm, please and release, I thought it rhymed.

Please ends with a softer s than release.

Also, I'll add that the poem is written in an extremely uninspired and thoughtless way for such a sensitive and intimate topic. The cheap rhyme scheme makes its statements come off as insincere. It's devoid of the care it proclaims to have, even down to its choice of verbs, e.g. "you WILL be at ease." Please give the topic a little more thought.

[Magpie]

Magpie, fuck yeah

No Fuck yeah. NO NO NO NO NO NO NO fuck yeah.

Fuck NO.

Do not misinterpret me. When I said "Fuck me another sex poem" it was obviously a pun but a pun that was also saying

" for fuck's sake another sex poem" -- nah that don't work either, but you know what I mean, i can't be arsed with this crap anymore

anyway, we most definitely were not high fiving

happy sunday

[Smiley]

Is it a delicate subject or just a shitty poem?

[wasellajam]

Is it a delicate subject or just a shitty poem?

No subject is out of bounds to write about.

So for me it fails so badly for its simple, dull and predator-like attitude towards a complex subject.

As to poem quality, this is at the same level as when you first joined. This site is full of teaching threads so it seems you have no desire to move forward, a lost opportunity for you. Rhyming lines do not make a poem, which you would know by now if you were reading the site.

My personal answer to your question.