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(11-13-2026, 12:56 PM)purplie Wrote:(09-01-2026, 04:17 AM)busker Wrote: Afraid of the night
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Childhood is afraid
of the night, the thin hands
of malevolent ghosts. Youth is unafraid
of the night, with its host
of stars like sheep, in the land
of a pale goddess the moon.
Mid life is afraid
not of night, but the soon
coming dawn, upending
respite and dreams of the past
where it hides from the future, no not a friend.
Old age is afraid
of the night once again,
of the one
with no light,
with no end.
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Hi purplie - I saw that you'd critted on the earlier edit. The newer ones supersede the earlier ones.
The line "unafraid of the night, of stars lulled like moonlit sheep" loses the hand/wand rhyme and 'lulled' is nowhere intended, so I wouldn't go with that, but thanks for reading and sharing your feedback.

