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		we meet on the forgotten beach, you armed with your kill me pills,
 and I your book of rhymes.
 a rowboat idles at the shore,
 as tiny as a child's toy,
 or a socialite's poodle.
 you wear white, like Dickinson,
 but not to proclaim chastity, for
 the dress has no sleeves,
 and reaches your knees,
 and perched between
 two thin fingers, like a great
 conductor's wand, a cigarette
 glows in the harsh, dusky light,
 waning like a gas lamp
 above the remote sands.
 
 idiosyncratic metaphors
 fall from your lips
 like sweet faux pas,
 as you stumble
 near to me, a flightless robin,
 your breath a gin
 distillery, and when I touch
 your ribs you flinch.
 I grasp the shoulder straps,
 you raise your arms,
 the dress collapses
 at your feet, like a peasant
 girl. I see the bruises,
 sheer black welts,
 from when you dived
 beneath his cart,
 and barely screamed
 as your bones broke.
 
 always in love with Death,
 the one man who played
 hard to get, would not be
 wooed those early years,
 but offered you his hand
 that day inside the garage
 of the gas.
 I envy your relationship.
 
 you stand in your undergarments, cold,
 I lay you on the yellow grains,
 remove your cigarette, and flick it near
 the shushing tide. like an audience filling
 each bare theatre seat, the stars emerge
 through their veil of black, and I undo
 your soft white bra, spread your thighs
 to reach your knickers, pure white lace,
 not gossamer, but seductive
 nonetheless.
 
 I've discovered you so many times,
 naked as a monk's conscience;
 you're my mother, my mistress,
 my incestuous dear,
 my teacher of death
 and of love and of fear.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		the use of the boat plays well off her book "The Awful Rowing Toward God" and of the death wish her depression inspired within her is extremely well done. the  lines that follow all lead to to the last stanza. 
 some really good lines that make me feel the period ( though i don't call the sixties a perod (for poetry lol) ) i think i should say the moment/s of who she was.
 
 remove your cigarette, and flick it near
 the shushing tide like an audience filling
 each bare theatre seat, is for me a great line of poetry.
 
 some of the images work so well in giving us some idea of the woman,
 the layered meaning in the title of the poem is a work of art in itself.
 
 thanks for the read jack.
 
 
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (10-03-2010, 01:25 PM)billy Wrote:  the use of the boat plays well off her book "The Awful Rowing Toward God" and of the death wish her depression inspired within her is extremely well done. the  lines that follow all lead to to the last stanza. 
 some really good lines that make me feel the period ( though i don't call the sixties a perod (for poetry lol) ) i think i should say the moment/s of who she was.
 
 remove your cigarette, and flick it near
 the shushing tide like an audience filling
 each bare theatre seat, is for me a great line of poetry.
 
 some of the images work so well in giving us some idea of the woman,
 the layered meaning in the title of the poem is a work of art in itself.
 
 thanks for the read jack.
 
Thanks for the kind words Billy   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		The way you choose images is just so perfect... quirky and vivid, but with a deftness and dreaminess that's just pure art. (lines like "naked as a monk's conscience" just slay me). Wonderful poem with a fascinating subject... a real treat of a read.
	 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		 (10-03-2010, 03:33 PM)addy Wrote:  The way you choose images is just so perfect... quirky and vivid, but with a deftness and dreaminess that's just pure art. (lines like "naked as a monk's conscience" just slay me). Wonderful poem with a fascinating subject... a real treat of a read. 
Thanks for the kind words addy   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		i enjoyed the write so much i left a comment on your blog    
you can put a link to your home page in your signature if you want jack
	
		
	 
	
	
		I loved it. It was very original. The whole use of the poetry in a sensuous way (I wouldn't say it was erotic poetry even though you had the erotic actions) was great. Your imagery is also top-notch. Bill has mentioned the theatre image, which is to be honest, an astonishing metaphor.  
I didn't get all of your ideas,but maybe that was just because I did not know who Anne Sexton was so I just took it as her being your (if you like) idol/woman of your dreams. Still, it was intensely vivid for me.
 
Good read, thanks   . For anyone who (like me) didn't know who Anne Sexton was, this should help:
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		This is a powerful write. Billy had mentioned it in a comment on one of my poems so I went looking for it. It was definitely worth finding. I love this! I would be posting too many lines to say what works for me. 
kill me pills
 
a rowboat idles at the shore,  
as tiny as a child's toy,  
or a socialite's poodle. 
 
The cigarette imagery
 
idiosyncratic metaphors  
fall from your lips  
like sweet faux pas, 
 
your breath a gin  
distillery, 
 
always in love with Death,  
the one man who played  
hard to get, would not be  
wooed those early years,  
but offered you his hand  
that day inside the garage  
of the gas.  
I envy your relationship. 
 
you stand in your undergarments, cold,  
I lay you on the yellow grains,  
remove your cigarette, and flick it near  
the shushing tide. like an audience filling  
each bare theatre seat, the stars emerge  
through their veil of black, and I undo  
your soft white bra, spread your thighs  
to reach your knickers, pure white lace,  
not gossamer, but seductive  
nonetheless. 
 
you're my mother, my mistress,  
my incestuous dear,  
my teacher of death  
and of love and of fear.
 
So, go ahead and just quote the poem Todd    Even what I left out I like. This idea of getting so into this person. This idea of knowing even though you don't know. In some sense, being brought into intimate connections through her words. Identifying  with her need to die. The ending is stellar.
 
It's a great poem. It has power, and you're somewhat changed by reading it. It's what art is supposed to do.
 
I mention Sexton briefly once in one of my works (nowhere near this good) and my friend recently published a poem about her reaction to Sexton's death in Boston Literary Magazine. She shared the same psychiatrist with Sexton when she was in her teens. The psychiatrist passed on some of her poetry to Anne.  Here's the link in case you're interested:
http://www.bostonliterarymagazine.com/fa...exton.html 
Just fantastic work!
 
Todd
	
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		Thank you so much for the link. That was an incredibly beautiful poem, filled with longing, despair, humanity in all its pain, but also a glimmer of hope, perhaps. Your friend is now among my heroes  
Thanks also for the kind words, Todd. You've really made my day  
		
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