Three Short Poems

[LiteraryAntiquity]

Bad girls aren't all bad.



Show gratitude
for the attitude
I'm giving you. [I deserve respect]
[There is] Madness-- behind the eyes.
[I am] Lazy.
The past is hazy to me now.
[My] Broken Ferbie,
say the words
I need to hear
before I spark up
on hate and fear.
[Started smoking too young]
I'm delusional
and I'm confrontational.
You mustn't see [because I'm so brave]
the little girl playing with love.

Little girl
observing
videos of
every living, loving thing [In her minds eye]
Dead.

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'Whiskey, Vodka, Rum, Gin. Whiskey, Vodka, Rum, Chin. Whiskey, Vodka, Stomach, Chin. Whiskey, Scar, Stomach, Chin. Frisky, Scar, Stomach, Chin. Whiskey, Vodka, Rum and Gin.'

It must be love
He missed the toilet,
he's drunk again and stumbling and bumbling and losing his mind.
He’s screaming and kicking and throwing his rattle out of the pram
I'm trying not to laugh, I mustn't laugh.
My hands are over my head to protect my skull.
I'll take two paracetamol to kill the headache
and take my shaking hands back to the sink
to wash the blood from my purple eye.
I am fine.
We are fine.
He loves me.
It’s just the drink.


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Beauty
There is perfection in her imperfection
and there are beauties in her flaws
Oh how we judge the innocent
we are our own lost cause.


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[billy]

a simple wow should suffice.

for me the middle one was absolutely nothing but great, well worthy of publishing.
original funny, loving and so down to earth. i love it. this is a poem worth remembering.

the 1st is also very good. can't see anything in it i'd change

and the last one, while good it feels a little blasé (maybe even a just a little hall mark) but good non the less. as a trio they shine
brighter than they do individually. well done LA. you moved me.

thanks for the read.

[heslopian]

The first poem overcomes possible "emo" stereotypes by almost calling attention to such bleeding heart cliches; it's a mischievous, witty, somewhat satirical piece, which also works at times as just deeply moving verse.
The second one, as Billy said, is nothing but great, a profoundly tender and serious work, getting to the core of addiction and despair, as well as co-dependent relationships.
Regarding the third, I would remove all punctuation, as a poem that short and simple can only be interrupted by commas and ellipses and so on (IMHO). Other than that, while not as strong as its predecessors, it's a pleasant little piece, vaguely reminiscent of old Asian verse, in its straightforward wisdom and direct style.

[srijantje]

great read LA

[LiteraryAntiquity]

Thank you lads, Jack, I will have a go at that - thank you

[srijantje]

i love the third one

[LiteraryAntiquity]

i love the third one

Thank you Srijantje!

[addy]

Whoa, you're really not pulling any punches with these. Bleak, but with a savage confidence that not really entice so much as bodily heaves the reader (And for these that's a very good thing! ). Bravo LA.