Haiku #1

[billy]

Opalescent blue
hovers tiny scattered ants.
A pitiless sky.

Original:

Opalescent blue
hovers tiny scattered ants.
Pitiless, the sky.

would it work better with 'over' after hovers?

i'll try my hand at seeing it.

the sky doesn't give a fuck about the ants?

if so that's more senryu as it's about something outside nature. the sky is not pitiless, it's just the sky. still a good effort and i'm sure i got it wring