Ripples Novel Chapter 1--REVISION 5

[Todd]

sooo this is the re-write for the book then

am suprised but not unhappy about how fast the pace is..am guessing the meat of the book is gonna be about the consequences

me only critique so far would be hurry up an get chap 2 posted an am intrested to see you can keep up the pace

theres enough detail without it being overloaded..the reader can fill in the blanks in their own way...i really like that

Thanks. I appreciate the read. Well, you've seen them both. Main character will develop more but is he coming off as less of a douche? I believe that's how you put it (and I agreed)