The onset of winter

[Jae Mc Donnell]

@ billy: As this is a critique forum, and the critique guidelines say It is possibly best to avoid giving “life advice” in a critique, other than as a direct requirement for interpretation of the piece, let's try sticking to the poem shall we? Thanks/ admin

Oooow Billy's in trouble.. Why am I saying this, I'll get myself in trouble Now we don't want any fighting big hugs everybody><. These little faces are great

Anyway thanks to all of you for the help I really do appreciate it and I am taking it all in. I was kinda thinking on both point of views and kinda thought that maybe a balance of both could be the key. Of course this must take a lot of practice which I do not have so I won't comment to much.

As for the poem I have come up with another review and would love to hear what you think. I think I will post it in the serious thread so people can be more indepth if they wish. Thankyou again for the help.