Two Things Made Her Smile
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This was a thoughtful read. I especially like the last six lines, because to me you were telling about her wisdom and those lines kinda shows the wisdom. It has a sweet tone as an adult looking back with child-like admiration still.
My only critique is that line 2 is long, other than that a really amazing read.
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Two Things Made Her Smile - by Pete Ak - 12-21-2012, 05:17 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by Leanne - 12-21-2012, 06:04 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by arbil_poieo - 12-21-2012, 07:39 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by billy - 12-21-2012, 09:18 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by Pete Ak - 12-21-2012, 11:08 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by billy - 12-21-2012, 11:55 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by Pete Ak - 12-21-2012, 08:34 PM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by 2onthemap - 12-23-2012, 06:07 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by Pete Ak - 12-23-2012, 04:36 PM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by Uncle Vertical - 12-22-2012, 09:48 AM
RE: Two Things Made Her Smile - by EAGLES 28 - 10-19-2022, 02:16 AM



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