01-13-2013, 12:18 PM
hi emma.
often, this kind of poem is too predictable, when i see one i expect a lot of cliche and i wasn't disappointed. a lot of stock phrasing. try and be unpredictable. try nit to be repetitive with the who am i and the i words.
Who am I to think I am
to break free
to fit
you'll all see
even then the words are stock. the who am i format you chose is one of the hardest to do so that the reader thinks it a good write
it is a start though and starts are excellent
thanks for the read.
often, this kind of poem is too predictable, when i see one i expect a lot of cliche and i wasn't disappointed. a lot of stock phrasing. try and be unpredictable. try nit to be repetitive with the who am i and the i words.
Who am I to think I am
to break free
to fit
you'll all see
even then the words are stock. the who am i format you chose is one of the hardest to do so that the reader thinks it a good write
it is a start though and starts are excellent
thanks for the read.
(01-13-2013, 06:44 AM)EmmaOline Wrote: Who am I.
Who am I to think a I am
Who am I to break free
Who am I to think I fit in
Hopefully one day you'll all see
Who am I to dance along
Who am I to sing your song
Who am I to don't be scared
One day you'll se that I belong
Who was I to just believe
Who was I to think you cared
Who was I to tell you secrets
Hey world, I'm just a bit scared
