inside love
#3
Hey there! This was really cool. You've got some great lines in there like "drinking a coke that's laced". Very nice. I think though that this feels like two poems and you could probably split them at the line "I know you're imperfect, and I accept you that way.". Maybe. It's just a thought. Either way, I dig it. Thanks for the read. Wink
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inside love - by Rye~murs - 01-11-2013, 06:05 PM
RE: inside love - by Jae Mc Donnell - 01-14-2013, 04:24 AM
RE: inside love - by monablackbird - 01-15-2013, 10:33 PM



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