Poetry Chess Game -- Brandon vs. Todd

[brandontoh]

I'm not very familiar with the haibun, but the poem works, from what I see. I tend not to comment on poems with any form or similarity to prose, but I do see how they work. Such an elitist aura from this poem though.

Triolet: To Chase Your Dream
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Came across a forking path,
No chance to turn back and run,
Not on the one-track time warpath.
Came across a forking path,
Options clear it ain't no math.
Stable boredom or volatile fun.
Came across a forking path,
No chance to turn back and run.

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Don't really like the 6th line as it stands, but it's such an important line. ><