01-29-2013, 02:46 PM
Oooohhh nice poem. You chose good lines. Very smooth flow and connection with the fairytales. Let's choose a form that's easier for me to write this time. =)
http://bensonofjohn.co.uk/poetry/formsse...a%20Cinque
Sonnetina Cinque - Of Silent Gazes, Of Algid love
Rd1
Overflowing worries, a sigh escapes.
Damaged statue of imposing presence;
On the stale couch, staring at old fire.
The flicker pensive, ran out of passion.
For what is a man to do, to build a man?
This warrior is beat, by time, by life.
Losing is a habit, and so is irony.
This single dad protects, but doesn't guide.
Loser raises losers, so it's best to let go.
A love so awkward, the loved doesn't know.
http://bensonofjohn.co.uk/poetry/formsse...a%20Cinque
Sonnetina Cinque - Of Silent Gazes, Of Algid love
Rd1
Overflowing worries, a sigh escapes.
Damaged statue of imposing presence;
On the stale couch, staring at old fire.
The flicker pensive, ran out of passion.
For what is a man to do, to build a man?
This warrior is beat, by time, by life.
Losing is a habit, and so is irony.
This single dad protects, but doesn't guide.
Loser raises losers, so it's best to let go.
A love so awkward, the loved doesn't know.
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