02-03-2013, 07:28 AM
That one e7 move was where I felt I slipped off the tracks. You've got this one, but we'll play it out and write the poems to the end. On your poem, I like the night got coloured into ballad. Here's my move and minute poem.
The Relationship's Dilemma
Re6
Oasis gives way to desert.
Our steps inert,
oppressive sun
water for one.
Two is a path of sand and bone,
but one alone
can still take flight,
betray by night.
Both will always take the water,
choose to slaughter.
Self interest
in each instance.
The Relationship's Dilemma
Re6
Oasis gives way to desert.
Our steps inert,
oppressive sun
water for one.
Two is a path of sand and bone,
but one alone
can still take flight,
betray by night.
Both will always take the water,
choose to slaughter.
Self interest
in each instance.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson