A haiku, a new growth

[Jae Mc Donnell]

nice edit jae. still needs a little more work though.
the seedlings in darkness works.
words like desire. heaven's etc are the other words lolo was on about.

Thanks for the reply Billy. I see what you are saying, but I was using desire as the noun and heaven's as in sky. But I know what you mean by desire not being an image. I have put up another update.
Thanks again