02-14-2013, 07:44 AM 
	
	
	
		That's really great. Even though it's a cold image, I get a real warm feeling, as in warm fire, fall asleep.
But on my last haiku I was told you shouldn't use adjectives. So maybe change out sleepy for sleeping maybe or drifting might work
 or drifting might work
Pristine snow blanket
Veils the field a sleepy hue --
The world falls asleep
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But on my last haiku I was told you shouldn't use adjectives. So maybe change out sleepy for sleeping maybe
 or drifting might work
 or drifting might workPristine snow blanket
Veils the field a sleepy hue --
The world falls asleep
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