My First Ever Haiku
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well done! comfortable and frigid all at once.
building on cidermaid's comment, snow does have many hues. maybe change the word sleepy and then change hue to hues. as it stands I agree that hue is a bit out of place-- I don't really see where the color fits in.
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My First Ever Haiku - by brandontoh - 02-13-2013, 11:26 AM
RE: My First Ever Haiku - by Jae Mc Donnell - 02-14-2013, 07:44 AM
RE: My First Ever Haiku - by AspiringWordWeaver - 02-26-2013, 06:09 AM
RE: My First Ever Haiku - by Hurst - 02-26-2013, 03:46 PM
RE: My First Ever Haiku - by cidermaid - 02-26-2013, 05:51 PM
RE: My First Ever Haiku - by justcloudy - 02-26-2013, 06:26 PM



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