My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit

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My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit

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03-07-2013, 11:41 AM

Hi Michelle,

It's the little things that matter: pavement, the by after dimmed, and the first line cut.

No nits. I really love it.

Best,

Todd

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit - by Michelle311 - 02-19-2013, 08:48 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Todd - 02-19-2013, 08:54 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Leanne - 02-19-2013, 08:59 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-19-2013, 09:00 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Todd - 02-19-2013, 12:34 PM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-19-2013, 01:01 PM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by jormungandr - 02-19-2013, 02:41 PM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-19-2013, 03:31 PM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Leanne - 02-20-2013, 04:41 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-20-2013, 05:28 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by schmitler - 02-20-2013, 05:30 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-20-2013, 05:33 AM

RE: New to this site - I appreciate any feedback! - by Michelle311 - 02-22-2013, 06:58 AM

RE: My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit - by Michelle311 - 03-07-2013, 10:24 AM

RE: My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit - by Todd - 03-07-2013, 11:41 AM

RE: My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit - by tjs2465 - 03-07-2013, 12:14 PM

RE: My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit - by Michelle311 - 03-10-2013, 03:46 PM

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