No title, but could use some advice

No title, but could use some advice

Brett David
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03-08-2013, 05:56 AM

Thank you for moving it to the right place for me.
Also thank you very much for the critique.

I'll throw out the second stanza, it is a bit redundant.

I have a question about the forcing of rhymes though. Do you mean looking for specific words to fit what you think to be the flow?

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No title, but could use some advice - by Brett David - 03-08-2013, 03:40 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Leanne - 03-08-2013, 05:18 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Brett David - 03-08-2013, 05:56 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Leanne - 03-08-2013, 06:02 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Brett David - 03-08-2013, 06:37 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Leanne - 03-08-2013, 06:47 AM

RE: No title, but could use some advice - by Jamie - 03-08-2013, 06:50 AM

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