03-08-2013, 06:02 AM
Essentially, yes.
Rhymes work best when they're in conjunction with meter -- and I don't just mean rhymes at the end of a line, the same applies for "internal" rhymes as well. They need to hit a "stressed" beat to work well, or they're lost (or forced, as you automatically try to emphasise those words and it throws out natural pronunciation). This really is just a matter of experience. There are plenty of exercises in the Poetry Practice forum that can help you, even if you're only reading through what's already been done and where corrections have been made.
It won't happen overnight, but it will happen!
Rhymes work best when they're in conjunction with meter -- and I don't just mean rhymes at the end of a line, the same applies for "internal" rhymes as well. They need to hit a "stressed" beat to work well, or they're lost (or forced, as you automatically try to emphasise those words and it throws out natural pronunciation). This really is just a matter of experience. There are plenty of exercises in the Poetry Practice forum that can help you, even if you're only reading through what's already been done and where corrections have been made.
It won't happen overnight, but it will happen!
It could be worse