No title, but could use some advice

[Leanne]

Not trying to be difficult, but I actually preferred the first lines of the first version

Folded sheets deliver the heat
As Iris wiggles the toes to his feet -- these lines are quite interesting and don't jump straight into the story, we're first given an idea of the environment where the warmth contrasts with the later cold breeze.

But otherwise, you're starting along the right track.