But A Fantasy, Still

But A Fantasy, Still

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03-27-2013, 11:15 AM

ORIGINAL

Spewing sorrow, for a left tomorrow.
Dancing, in unhinged grace.
A kind of addiction - or might it be fiction?
Into the stars we gaze.

FIRST REVISION

I'm spewing sorrow, for a left tomorrow.
We're dancing, in unhinged grace;
A kind of addiction. Or might it be fiction?
Into the stars we gaze.

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But A Fantasy, Still - by Volaticus - 03-27-2013, 11:15 AM

RE: First time sharing a poem, so any comment would be greatly appreciated. - by neena2504 - 03-28-2013, 12:40 AM

RE: First time sharing a poem, so any comment would be greatly appreciated. - by Volaticus - 03-28-2013, 02:45 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by UnicornRainbowCake - 03-31-2013, 08:12 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 08:28 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 10:08 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by milo - 03-31-2013, 10:12 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 10:25 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by milo - 03-31-2013, 10:28 AM

RE: But a Fantasy, Still - by trueenigma - 03-31-2013, 10:54 AM