03-31-2013, 08:12 AM
It's beautiful how 4 lines can set such an atmosphere. L3 is the strong point for me. My only (really picky) critique is I'm not sure on the 'spewing sorrow'. It doesn't quite fit in with the rest of very fluid poem.
Still, I can't see how to improve it, it's lovely
Still, I can't see how to improve it, it's lovely
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)