But A Fantasy, Still

[Truerenigma]

The way I meant it when I wrote it, was that their 'dancing, in unhinged grace', is 'a kind of addiction'/'fiction'.

"We're dancing in unhinged grace,
A kind of addiction. Or might it be fiction?

In that case this is better, as far as the grammar is concerned.

I believe you could still keep the hyphen after addiction, if you wanted to connect the two thoughts. Just a matter of changing a period into a comma.

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I hate to say it but the idea of suggesting the dancing is fictitious doesn't really make sense. "or is this fiction" would work but is a bit abstract, suggesting perhaps the while poem is fictitious, while "A kind of addiction- or is that fiction" would suggest that the addiction may be fictitious, which would make a little more sense.

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If you write a revision, well you post it? I'd be interested in seeing what you do with it in the next draft.