Once - Edited

[Volaticus]

Thanks for the critiques, and advice guys.

The unsettled balance bit was just about how sometimes you're happy, and sometimes you're sad. Feelings are always changing, like the river is always flowing. I don't know if that makes sense to you guys, but I like it.

I will work on this poem with all your advice at hand.

It makes sense to me, but I don't think that the stanza clearly conveys that. A bit of tweaking and I think it could work well, though