An April Stroll (second edit)

[billy]

I tried to do a haiku, with an idea I got from a walk outside :-) I'm not quite sure if it's done right, though?

An April Stroll
Ducks peck in the pond
Paddle in slush-iced-water
I pour out my lunch.

really solid effort, using a title is optional.
i'd suggest swapping pond and water round, that way the duck are pecking water and paddling in an iced pond. not sure slush is needed.

it seem soup is lunch but it feels a little ambiguous so why not say what it is,

coffee for lunch again

soup for lunch again the options are endless.
don't worry too much about 575

great effort