Chiromancy

[Crepuscule]

I read it as a lover on the first read, right from the first stanza actually, the treatment of waking next to someone seemed to warrant it. Just another take if you need it.

milo

Thanks milo...


One thing I'm still undecided about is how to indicate the pause in S1:

Originally I had:

Forms emerging,
your arms and your hands.

Then went for

Forms emerging...
your arms and your hands.

Which Jbird informed me is wrong. It's currently at:

Forms emerging --
your arms and your hands.

Which I don't like particularly.

Ted Hughes uses a neat way of doing it, where he uses a carriage return and an indent:

Forms emerging
_______________your arms and your hands.

But how widespread is that?

What's the best option?