An April Stroll (second edit)

[Volaticus]

The first two lines work better but I'm not keep on the last line. It's no worse than your first edit's last line, but it's as if you crumble up your sandwich to some effect - that then isn't explained. Perhaps play around with it again?

Hi Amy,
Thanks for the response Honestly, I thought that it was pretty clear, that me crumbling up my sandwich, meant that it was for the ducks. Those poor ducks in the cold water
Do you think that it was too vague, what I was trying to convey? If it is, then I'll give it another go