Chiromancy

[milo]

I wouldn't kill it but maybe try a restructuring, save the best. I liked the concept of a palm reading (I for one loved the title too) of a sleeping lover, I liked the idea of specific lines with specific meanings. If anything, that was the section that could have been fleshed out more. Are there other personalities of the lover that reflect back on the narrator? What about things that could have led to the recent suicide attempts?

just thoughts.