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04-24-2013, 06:23 AM
A very emotional poem, with a really nice flow overall. The grammar is not so good, though. You've forgot to capitalize the I's. Capitalizing the first word in each stanza could also be an idea, just a suggestion. And though the flow was really good throughout, I think some of the rhymes were a bit forced. It could just be me, but I knew that 'here' would be followed by 'fear', for instance.
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