04-29-2013, 10:32 PM 
	
	
	
		Seems long-winded, with sudden stops and twists with commas around one word; and things like inveigh her now, and intrude her solitude, sounding a little rigid and silly, unless you talk that way.
Despite those things: it's not a horrible poem.
	
	
	
Despite those things: it's not a horrible poem.

