Two senryu

[serge gurkski]

The crazy Chaffinch.
With all of the sky to choose,
Flew at the window.

Entering boldly,
Blazing bright red bravery.
The humble Robin.

simply fantastic!!

Just one thing: I would write senryuu or use a makron over the "u".
If you don't, that would be like writing High Q instead of haiku.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Senry%C5%AB


thanks for the read!

cheers

serge

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as for content: you cannot know that, but the first senryuu describes me perfectly well! ,-)

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I could say sth about how your second senryuu explains the first: very fine and subtle! congrats!

Thanks Serge for your kind comments it is very much appreciated. Also thanks for the advice over spelling along with the wiki link it is very informative.
Glad you enjoyed them. Thanks.