05-04-2013, 02:56 PM 
	
	
	
		Overall, the first stanza drew me in right away, but I wonder if a little more consistency in meter within each stanza would have helped it finish as strong as it started.  Thank you for sharing!
	
	
	
	
| 
					You
				 | 
| 
					« Next Oldest | Next Newest »
				 | 
| Messages In This Thread | 
| You - by The Beef - 04-23-2013, 09:08 AM RE: You - by DestWrites - 04-24-2013, 04:24 PM RE: You - by pepes.kitty - 05-04-2013, 02:56 PM RE: You - by tigrflye - 09-28-2013, 02:32 PM |