The desk at war

[Keith]

Edit 1

Soldiers inside the staple gun,
deployed by unseen hands,
always one more, ready to go.

In-line strapped to the rail,
fold their arms as they leave the plane, I think the word "leave" is too simple for what they are doing, maybe depart or abandon
dropping through white clouds.

Uniformed beach landings,
guns held high, knives at their side,
plunging into breaking seas. I love this image, very powerful

Onward they march, relentless, "relentless" is good word for it in my experience!
integral to the war machine,
and the beat of its linear heart. linear...interesting. to be interpreted as never changing or growing?

The first stanza really got to me. gives a good sense of an enlisted person's inability to control their own life in that aspect, and that they feel much like pawns in this moment. I've never seen this analogy before- military soldiers much like a stapler/staple gun, but definitely gets the point across!

Thanks for taking the time to post your reply glad you got this one and picked out the points I was trying to make, I will have a look at your suggested changes for the next edit thanks TOMH