05-23-2013, 09:34 AM
Hi James,
It's me again, another beautifully written stylish piece. But also one which I find as baffling as I do fascinating, and like Time On My Hands said the other day, continue to read your poetry I will because of that style of yours.
Also it seems that the past few poems you've posted are very personal to you, which firstly makes them harder to understand the the references but also makes it harder for you when there is not a lot of comments being made. But like I said the other day, don't view that as a sign that people don't like your poetry.
At times it seems very cryptic like in this poem where it says "cheetah lights", and because I've noticed in your other poems how you've done clever little things with words, I'm always looking for anagrams or palindromes to help me. Therefore I managed to get "Chalet Heights" from "Cheetah lights" but later on it becomes "cheetah light" so I must be wrong. Also from "Where the red is dye" I found "Where they desired", "sickle soar" "coral skies" or I am going to deep.
"Submarine eyes" is a beautiful phrase, and so many others.
I'm kind of worried that if you don't get many other comments you'll be disheartened and you'll definitely get sick of me coming up with weird anagrams.
If I was you I would try in serious crit, but I never said that.
At least in there people would definitely comment and they could tell you what needs changing or whatever. Just as long as you make sure spelling is perfect and possibly use more punctuation. It's definitely worth a shot, what's the worst that could happen, you come back here and I'll give you some more anagrams. Think about it. Keep writing and I'm still reading the other poems you posted.
Thanks again for a trip round your world.
AR
It's me again, another beautifully written stylish piece. But also one which I find as baffling as I do fascinating, and like Time On My Hands said the other day, continue to read your poetry I will because of that style of yours.
Also it seems that the past few poems you've posted are very personal to you, which firstly makes them harder to understand the the references but also makes it harder for you when there is not a lot of comments being made. But like I said the other day, don't view that as a sign that people don't like your poetry.
At times it seems very cryptic like in this poem where it says "cheetah lights", and because I've noticed in your other poems how you've done clever little things with words, I'm always looking for anagrams or palindromes to help me. Therefore I managed to get "Chalet Heights" from "Cheetah lights" but later on it becomes "cheetah light" so I must be wrong. Also from "Where the red is dye" I found "Where they desired", "sickle soar" "coral skies" or I am going to deep.
"Submarine eyes" is a beautiful phrase, and so many others.
I'm kind of worried that if you don't get many other comments you'll be disheartened and you'll definitely get sick of me coming up with weird anagrams.
If I was you I would try in serious crit, but I never said that.
At least in there people would definitely comment and they could tell you what needs changing or whatever. Just as long as you make sure spelling is perfect and possibly use more punctuation. It's definitely worth a shot, what's the worst that could happen, you come back here and I'll give you some more anagrams. Think about it. Keep writing and I'm still reading the other poems you posted.
Thanks again for a trip round your world.
AR
wae aye man ye radgie