Senryu of a narcissistic male

[Ryan_w_r]

little typo in "diamonds".
I like it, but it is a senryuu. (same number of syllables, traditionally, but
"Senryū tend to be about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature, and senryū are often cynical or darkly humorous while haiku are more serious." (quoted from wikiedia)

Thank you for pointing out the typo, and educating me on the poem not being a haiku. I wasn't sure if it was... I read online that historically haiku's are usually about nature but as long as it was 17 syllables it was technically a haiku...But ya learn something new everyday! Thanks for the help.

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Haiku of a narcissistic male

You are beneath me
I eat coal, shit out dimonds diamonds
I am immortal

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Hahaha is that even a true haiku ?

i'll second serge's two comments as to it being more senryu than haiku. a haiku would use a seasonal word besides the points mentioned.
good effort

Thanks for reading billy! I'll give it another shot and come through with a real haiku