To The Masses (edit based on Tom's corrections and some of his suggestions )

[serge gurkski]

I pray the sweetness of hope
instead of love.
this line above is great

Do not – for the best of you – indulge in that
pool of pain made so to break you
once you lost this sweet feeling.
again good

You better do not
corrupt the stones that hold you,
but should you feel so inclined,
to cut it short; do, please, not
waste away of what you don't have yet,

"you better do not" doesnt sound right to me. "You better not" or "do not" sounds better for a flow.




In altered zones of half-delight
I tumble around and the days
steal themselves away.
The lovers come and go,
leaving me lonely and
politics is not soothing me either,
I talk America, I talk to a beautiful nation.

Beautiful is not you my friend,
but the concept that governs you, is.
Just dare to read Jefferson.

thats all I got, it reads good except what I pointed out. But what do I know, I post in Novice.

Oh, thank you for the feedback, RC. I did not see your comment before. It does not matter at all to me where you post. I'll look into the things you pointed it out. (You are absolutely right about: "You better not" being much better not just for the flow but that is simply how it should be written. Thank you for the hint!

cheers :-)

serge

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A lot of expatriates gave up on America. From the moment they brought slaves to America there would be some issues. One can imagine how quickly innocence vanished from the New World. In regards to philosophy there is the whole nature of mankind to consider. It is interesting to see a European take on the Harlem Renaissance.

Hi Brownlie,

this is not directed against "White" America. I was reading a lot of Harlem Renaissance and Négritude texts recently and also listening to
West African and Mississippi Delta Music. Came across "Strange fruit" again, a very shocking youtube vid with Nina Simone singing that song and accompanied by bloody gruesome fotos.
Of course (Germany very much included) cruelty and stupidity are to be encountered everywhere on this globe and at all times.
My main issue is political (and cultural) emancipation, not condemning
crimes that have already been condemned by people much more affected by them.
Another interest of mine is how art can flourish under miserable circumstances and why. And why it can be so good! And if there is a - kinky - correlation between the degree of misery and pain and the level of artistic /aesthetic quality.

Thank you for your comment. I only saw your reply a couple of minutes ago. (Was distracted by another utterance made by someone else. ;-) )

cheers

serge

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hyper-gurkism?

goodness - is that acute or chronic?

perhaps It can be either - in this case?

<<< perhaps yes.

for the sake of my logic - is there an opposing condition hypo-gurk?

<<<
good question. Politeness forbids me to answer it, because it would apply to people not Gurk. You will understand.

To put it in a wormholy* nutshell or wherever you want it:

The question is more tricky than I first was willing to explain. It can either relate to this text of mine in relation to my other scribblings or to my texts in comparison to those of other writers.
That is why I refrain from discussing - and in particular in public - possibly triflish* considerations that don't even make any sense to me, despite the fact that, notwithstanding the improbability that there could ever be anything too absurd or kinky enough for Gurk to be unworthy of his consideration, as you seem to imply to be knowledgeable of, some people could now feel inclined to consider this very statement of mine as no less than totally anti-Gurkskish.

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*to procure you ever so gladly and delightedly with 2 new ad-hoc Gurkskisms