03-10-2010, 12:10 PM 
	
	
	
		i enjoyed the first verse.
i think if you can keep that style into the next two stanza you'll have a good poem Lb
in the last two verses try not to tell us about anything, show it to us.
i do think you're improving in style
thanks for the read.
	
	
	
i think if you can keep that style into the next two stanza you'll have a good poem Lb
in the last two verses try not to tell us about anything, show it to us.
i do think you're improving in style

thanks for the read.

 

