Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet]
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(08-06-2013, 12:31 PM)Wildcard Wrote:  loosely suspended
amnesia leaves fall on
my lonely mind
good effort mark

i'd suggest removing no from the 2nd line

it takes a bit of thinking about but works pretty well Smile
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Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet] - by Wildcard - 08-06-2013, 12:31 PM
RE: Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet] - by billy - 08-06-2013, 12:36 PM



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