Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet]

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Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet]

billy Offline

Are you alluding to me?

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08-06-2013, 12:36 PM

(08-06-2013, 12:31 PM)Wildcard Wrote: loosely suspended
amnesia leaves fall on
my lonely mind

good effort mark

i'd suggest removing no from the 2nd line

it takes a bit of thinking about but works pretty well Smile

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RE: Senryu [unconfirmed as of yet] - by billy - 08-06-2013, 12:36 PM

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