Bird (edit 2)

Bird (edit 2)

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08-29-2013, 08:47 AM

I've updated the op with a new version. I took most of the criticism into account, I think this one is more concise/economical. I feel like the poem is getting somewhere, probably still has a little while to go. Much better then morning mourning imo Big Grin

I've gotten a lot of great feedback thus far, it means good deal, hopefully I can get a little bit more.

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Bird (edit 2) - by makeshift - 08-08-2013, 03:00 AM

RE: Bird - by TheWall0912 - 08-08-2013, 03:17 AM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-08-2013, 04:56 PM

RE: Bird - by Bunx - 08-08-2013, 03:42 AM

RE: Bird - by Green Ink - 08-08-2013, 11:10 AM

RE: Bird - by milo - 08-08-2013, 11:14 AM

RE: Bird - by newsclippings - 08-08-2013, 05:22 PM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-08-2013, 06:04 PM

RE: Bird - by billy - 08-08-2013, 06:41 PM

RE: Bird - by ChristopherSea - 08-09-2013, 12:43 AM

RE: Bird - by newsclippings - 08-09-2013, 10:10 AM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-09-2013, 11:47 AM

RE: Bird - by newsclippings - 08-09-2013, 11:53 AM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-09-2013, 12:29 PM

RE: Bird - by milo - 08-09-2013, 12:41 PM

RE: Bird - by billy - 08-09-2013, 01:08 PM

RE: Bird - by tectak - 08-10-2013, 03:46 PM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-19-2013, 04:18 PM

RE: Bird - by ChristopherSea - 08-20-2013, 07:40 AM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-20-2013, 11:43 AM

RE: Bird - by ChristopherSea - 08-20-2013, 12:10 PM

RE: Bird - by ChristopherSea - 08-20-2013, 12:26 PM

RE: Bird - by milo - 08-20-2013, 11:57 AM

RE: Bird - by makeshift - 08-20-2013, 12:22 PM

RE: Bird edit 2 - by makeshift - 08-29-2013, 08:47 AM

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