Spiky Friend
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(07-24-2013, 03:32 PM)cidermaid Wrote:  Hi,

I am growing to look forward to your offerings in this form. You have a lovely touch and eye for these I feel.
On this one I personally think that perhaps you do not need "Friend" in the title, as spiky could be said to relate to all three lines but not so much the other two. JMHO

All the best AJ.
I agree with this feedback, you could remove friend from the title, that way it makes the reader think more about the connection and relationship you have, nice poem!
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Messages In This Thread
Spiky Friend - by Volaticus - 07-24-2013, 11:26 AM
RE: Spiky Friend - by cidermaid - 07-24-2013, 03:32 PM
RE: Spiky Friend - by Volaticus - 07-25-2013, 07:29 AM
RE: Spiky Friend - by Malu - 09-10-2013, 02:27 AM
RE: Spiky Friend - by Volaticus - 09-10-2013, 02:28 AM
RE: Spiky Friend - by billy - 07-24-2013, 04:24 PM
RE: Spiky Friend - by Magpie - 07-24-2013, 09:37 PM
RE: Spiky Friend - by R.C. KITCHENS - 07-25-2013, 10:21 AM
RE: Spiky Friend - by Volaticus - 07-26-2013, 01:09 AM



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