One Night (edit #2)

[ellajam]

heh -just shows what taste can do, I was going to balk about "forwent", it feels, imo, too alien for this piece, I would go for something more comfortable like skipped.

ha, I agree, I was sounding out skipping, while fighting huddled.

Skipping, good. or skipped. or they skip.

if you could find a way to break on skipped it would provide a nice double meaning expressing the joy of not having children.

While I understand the joy of not having children , I can't figure out how a break on skipped would imply that. I'll see what happens when I shift the words around.

Again, thanks to all for discussing it with me.