09-24-2013, 02:30 AM
Hi Blah,
I'm sorry but i could not make any sense in terms of content or poetic art from your (to my read) list of random words. Normally in this forum I try and think of something possitive to say to encourage the writer, but for once i am at a loss to know what could be done beyond a complete re-write with some sort of connection offered to make this more than just a list. You need to show me what it is that is the object or event of the realisation.
Sorry to be so harsh AJ.
I'm sorry but i could not make any sense in terms of content or poetic art from your (to my read) list of random words. Normally in this forum I try and think of something possitive to say to encourage the writer, but for once i am at a loss to know what could be done beyond a complete re-write with some sort of connection offered to make this more than just a list. You need to show me what it is that is the object or event of the realisation.
Sorry to be so harsh AJ.