Memory

[mortal]

Tnx for comments, I tried to work with them.

Reflection on the water, why the comma? - well I guess habit?
stares back at me,
there's question in those eyes,
where is our love, where are WE.

Then memory comes so quietly,
of a past; a picture of me and her, bit of a cliche, just draw the picture for us .. nothing comes to mind...
standing together, holding gently,
a moment so fade and far. did you mean faded? but I love the sound of "fade and far" - here is intentionally fade and far - to me also sounds nice

It's like it was just a dream,
but my heart hurts so much,an image that would make me feel it would be better than telling me - perhaps -> but it hurts to much,
reminding me it all was real,
and body; missing your touch. missing something here? - here I thought of not only broken heart missing love but also body missing touch, probably better if I change it to skin, instead of body

Raindrops start to fall,
reflection is there no more,
my head is empty, memories gone,
just me standing, alone on shore. alone on the shore is pretty cliche
[/quote] (I like to use cliche sometimes and it fits somehow)