09-28-2013, 06:09 PM 
	
	
	(09-25-2013, 05:29 AM)mortal Wrote: Reflection on the water,This is my absolute first post here, so my critic skills may be unreliable. I must say I am rather partial to your formatting, but the on and off again rhymes were a slight annoyance given that I am new and think rhyming is the only thing that matters...
stares back at me,
there's question in those eyes,
where is our love, where are WE.
Then memory comes so quietly,
of a past; a picture of me and her,
standing together, holding gently,
a moment so fade and far.
It's like it was just a dream,
but my heart hurts so much,
reminding me it all was real,
and body; missing your touch.
Raindrops start to fall,
reflection is there no more,
my head is empty, memories gone,
just me standing, alone on shore.
 You were able to conjure some nice images and I love how the meaning all comes together at the end, just as it should.
 You were able to conjure some nice images and I love how the meaning all comes together at the end, just as it should.
	
